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Tick tock tick tock tick…the wall clock ticked away
incessantly as Manick stood by the window staring into the sunlit skies. He was
officially twelve years old today and yet, he was unhappy – consumed by the
gloomiest, darkest sort of unhappiness possible. Of course Pradhan uncle had
come around with the ceremonial birthday kheer and the kheer was perfect. It
had lifted the gloominess for a while, but it seeped back in soon enough. All
his friends were with him – Paul, Kuntu, Zara, Ashesh, Piyali and even Khalid
(his best friend) – and yet, the sadness covered him like a blanket protecting
him from the potential onslaught of cheer.
Manick thought of the birthdays gone by. His parents always
had a surprise gift and a card waiting for him on his nightstand on his
birthday morning every year. A whole day of comprehensive pampering would
follow with more gifts from family, phone calls, outings, more surprise gifts
(on some good years) and celebrations in school. The evening would be ‘spotlight’
time for Manick as his friends and their parents arrived in hordes with gifts
and ‘Happy birthday beta’ wishes and fun times would be had. Ah! The silly
games and songs, blowing the candles on the birthday cake, cutting the cake,
his parents beaming with pride and joy as he became older and wiser. Such
glorious times!
And then one day, all of that disappeared. This birthday (to be precise) was a complete
contrast. No surprise gift/card waited for him on his nightstand, there was no
pampering whatsoever, he hadn’t gone to school to celebrate and no party was
planned. Manick was grown up now, but he couldn’t fathom how his parents and
everyone around him could change everything so drastically. All that was
tradition before, was now merely a memory. He did feel all grown up and this
barely felt like a birthday at all.
He was a man now – with an adult responsibility to himself
and the world he lived in. Maybe that’s what his parents wanted to make him
understand. Maybe they had wanted to show him that life isn’t a fairytale – far
from it. It’s a tough place to be and they probably wanted to harden him to
life’s realities as soon as he reached an ‘age of understanding’ as they used
to put it to him sometimes.
He sighed and played around with an ant moving determinedly
across the windowsill. “How odd,” Manick thought. “The ant has a huge family
and tonnes of brothers and sisters and yet, it carries out its individual duty
to the colony, as best it can.” He smiled to himself. Ma would have been proud
of his sharpened analogical prowess. Perhaps he was like the ant too. He would
have to pull up his socks and start behaving like a man now. He was no longer a boy.
And yet, the feeling gnawed at him. “Why did everything have
to change so suddenly? Why was it not more gradual and slow so that I COULD
ADAPT MORE EASILY?” And then all of a sudden, it hit him - just how lonely he
felt. In his sudden transition to maturity, he was suddenly all alone. He would
grow wild and henceforth all his birthdays would be similar to this one. He would be like a
wildflower that one sees lining muddy raw village paths, but nobody seems
to care much about. Why would one care about a wildflower, when there are
roses, jasmines and lilies to be considered and appreciated?
Manick felt the bitterness stemming from his heart. He could
taste it in his soul. He despised growing up. And eventually the despise turned
to despair and he looked at the clouds outside longingly, a wish forming
rapidly in his heart. He clung on to it because the evanescence of life scared
him. He remembered how his father would say on the night before his birthday
every year, “Make a wish son. If you believe in it, it’ll come true.”
So while his friends played hide and seek in the corridoors
of the building, his beseeching wish was thrust violently into the cosmos. “I don’t know
why ma and baba left me so suddenly, but I know they’re not coming back for me. Please let them know I love them
and please….please…..send me a new ma and baba soon.” He felt a hand on his shoulders
and he burst into tears as Khalid hugged him tightly – like only a best friend
can.
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That night the orphanage was very still, when Pradhan uncle
burst into the room and woke up a sleeping Manick and his friends. His face was
glowing and he held some papers in his hand. As he sauntered up to Manick’s
bed, out of breath and smiling from ear to ear, Manick and Khalid exchanged knowing
glances. Their hearts beat faster ever second and they knew full well that the
cosmos had just created a miracle and answered Manick’s prayer. He would be a
wildflower no more.
--------------- Shreyasi Majumdar
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A simple story written with deceptively innocuous elan. Simply Superb !!!...farokh.
ReplyDeleteThank u Farokh. Your encouraging words mean a lot!
DeleteVery nice one :) ATB for BAT
ReplyDeleteMany thanks Rahul
DeleteVery well written. The turmoil of emotions surged in an orphan mind was very well captured and beautifully culminated into the topic 'make a wish'. Nice job !!
ReplyDeleteHere's mine : Binzy - A wishful wish(55 fiction)
Thanks Binzy! Much appreciated!
DeleteWhat a story Shreyasi .. most wonderful .. so emotional .. and a happy ending wow .. great work .. All the Best for BAT.
ReplyDeleteMy Entry - Vikas Khair - Wishes
Thanks a lot for your kind words Vikas!
Deletevery well written....loved this one.
ReplyDeleteAww thanks !
Deleteturmoil of emotions! classic... ATB for BAT:)
ReplyDeleteUthra Suresh- If only wishes were horses
Thank you Uthra!
Deletesuperb story.. the emotions and turmoils were so beautifully captured!!
ReplyDeleteAll The Best for BAT :)
Thank you much!
DeleteI wish I was a film maker. I could have made short films then.
ReplyDeleteKeep at it apple ! You rock !
Thank you! Glad u liked it!
DeleteI loved the ending. Superb story.
ReplyDeleteThank you dilip
Deleteआपके शब्द तस्वीर बन आँखों के सामने चलने लगे
ReplyDeleteहमेशा की तरह आपने फिर दिल जीत लिया
बेहद सुन्दर और मार्मिक रचना
You are most kind with your words Sainiji. So glad you liked it. Dhyanyavaad.Shreyasi.
ReplyDeleteWow..What a read...brilliantly executed in word, amazing :) Loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot ayushi
Deletevery emotional,flawless
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteA simple story well narrated! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you akila
DeleteAh well, the powerless must have a dream or two...the concluding part was just so good! Loved this, Shreyasi!:)
ReplyDeleteATB for BAT~
Thank you Panchali! Loved ur entry as well!
DeleteUf! This is too good...
ReplyDeleteAll the best for BAT!
My entry goes here...
http://www.locomente.blogspot.in/2013/08/best-days-of-my-life.html
Haha thanks satya!
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